Quite impressed.
Look at you John, got a great deal of good composers listening to your every note, I will now joine them ^^.
Onto the review!
The sad melody was exceptional, it grabbed my attention right away, and as John_Floyd suggested, some eqaulizing would have done this piece a lot of justice.
There seems to be a clash in notes here man, the two piano melodies are not very compatible, I would recommend introducing them seperatly instead of at the same time, or look over those notes, keep one of them simple bass notes, and keep the lighter melody going.
I would advice against trying to create melodies on top of an instrument with the same instrument, that keeps them muffled. For example, instead of having them both piano's, have one of them perhaps a violin, and then the other a piano, this adds a lot of flavour, AND it allows the melody to flow much smoother, as well as adding to the voice and emotions of the piece.
4/5 from me JohnF_N, keep them coming, I will keep listening.