Wunderbar!
ah snares!
This song reminds me of the War piece, especially when you have that sole timpini and the snares start going... but then that violin you add to the mix, and then the trumpets.
I think it may actually be better to start off the song like that, first snares, then the timpini as a form of tempo beat, then the strings, and so on from there!
I can definatly hear some melody work, for something you did just quickly, I am quite impressed.
Those snares could use a bit of work Harddrive.
http://www.newgrounds.com/audio/view.php?id=1465908&sub=429
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In this link is a collection of a lot of good composers, and in this profile, is my newest piece, the rise of Dark Lords, now I want you to listen to the first 20 seconds of that song, becase it starts off with a snare and percussoinal start, and I feel it may help you expand on your snare skills.
The song as a whole felt very intact.
Now some suggestions outside the norm.
I see you've dived a bit into horror music, excellent, I too am currently trying to create some dark stuff, not succeeding too well, but with practice right ^^.
Organ, organ, organ, every dark piece, feels just at home with a nice classical church organ! If you have one, try it out, replace the horns with it, and temporarily make the strings mute, so you can just listen to the organ and the flute, I think it may sound rather neat ^^.
Piano/Organ, Flute, High Strings, Choir
These four instruments, I find are the very backbone for some amazing horror music, as well as soundeffects, many many soundeffects, but forget the soundeffects, lets just focus on the piece as a whole ^^.
I will give you 5/5 because you are taking the right steps, and cannot wait to hear what you might bring later ^^. Keep them coming Harddrive.